What do you think about my story so far?

Okay: First of all, really nice imagery. All the descriptions at the beginning were beautiful! But, things got confusing. All the action got sort of muddled, and didn't really affect me emotionally. Build some tension before your action instead of just suddenly having it happen. (Ex: Give a lead up until her drunken father comes in, and always in 1st person show what is going on emotionally in the character) It was good. Keep writing and you'll be sure to improve. :)